Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of job should be highly paid?
It is argued that movies celebrities, pop stars, and sports personalities are usually overpaid. This essay will completely disagree with the statement because only the top performers have a big pay-cheque, and people in the healthcare sector should be given a higher salary because they contribute to society.
Firstly, not all celebrities, musicians, or athletes are paid a large sum of money; they earn after reaching the top position in their discipline. This is to say that the income of stars in the entertainment business is linked with competitions they have to overcome to reach success. For example, as per an article more than 4 million people every year take part in the Indian Idol show, but only one person wins the prize money along with a singing contract. Furthermore, the majority of stars do not hold their top positions for a long period and are replaced by the next younger energetic generation person.
Individuals in the medical care sector should be provided with a higher remuneration because they have a much greater contribution to society. This is because human life is much more precious and people who are involved in this profession play a vital role in saving lives, which is more important. For example, as per an article published in the Times Magazine, doctors and nurses’ average salaries are 40% less than the average industry salary in sports, music, and acting.
In conclusion, individuals who are top performers earn a higher salary only, but I believe medical practitioners should receive a higher salary because they save lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1324.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11196911197 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80521527136 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586872586873 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 29.4158120745 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 132.4 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140680295548 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055382383279 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0257681729036 0.0667982634062 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0775181489246 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379831642814 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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