Some people participate in extra-curricular activities such as volunteering in charitable events or joining dance groups to gain more knowledge and experience. Others simply focus on their goals such as academic studies or work. Which do you think helps in improving a person's knowledge and experience? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Knowledge is the key to achieve success in life or career. In order to attain more information and experience, there are number of people who participate in leisure time activities such as dance. However, others only focus on just one career or study plan to fulfill their dreams. I suppose that one specific goal along with extra- curricular activities are important to wider the area of our knowledge.
To commence with, certain people take part in various activities these days such as dancing, singing and volunteering charitable events to gather experience of new things everytime. As, it will refresh our minds and help us to work with more confidence and concentration. For example, nowadays, most of schools incorporating great number of activities along with essential subjects, to make students multitaskers in every field due increase in competition. Thus, knowledge is a way to endure success by getting grip at most of extracurricular activities in addition to basic study.
In contrast, getting more and more knowledge and experience in particular field will allow us to be competitive in certain field. But, this person has the ability to resolve issue or answer any questions regarding this field instantly. For example, every person has different strengths or weaknesses and could not able to do multitasking. As a result, setting one goal will make them more efficient and have clear one path to acheive success.
In conclusion, knowledge and experiences help people to survive in this competitive world. In my opinion, multitaskers are able to get more new experiences by learning different things apart from academic studies, whereas, others can focus on one goal to do better in that field by having all the information about it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, regarding, so, thus, whereas, apart from, for example, i suppose, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in particular, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1479.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22614840989 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9526092418 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593639575972 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0192444 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.642857143 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2142857143 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5 7.06120827912 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277189748634 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847824689642 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547409399775 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16262339954 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543536240679 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.