Some people say that advertisement targeting children may have negative effects on them, and suggest banning such advertisement as a solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Essay topics:

Some people say that advertisement targeting children may have negative effects on them, and suggest banning such advertisement as a solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays, the televisions are bombarded with various type of advertisements from A to Z. Many children become victims of these commercials. I therefore, agree that advertising should be prohibited because they are full of misleading contents as well as they can prove to be a major distraction in their academic years.

To commence with, the adverts which target children are mostly misleading them about major facts they are glorifying the products which are neither beneficial or required by them like Maggie noodles has got all the children as major fan followers and it is advertised as a nutritious snack loaded with vitamins and minerals which is a myth. Neither is it loaded with vegetables nor is it a nutritious snack, its only function is to satiate a child’s appetite. Furthermore, it is found to be highly addictive, hence, it’s advertisement should be totally banned.

Secondly, a major reason banning television commercials which lure children with glamourous advertisements is that television is an audio visual median and manufactures of the products hire services of the best advertisement agencies to produce such beautiful ads with great tag lines, catchy themes, adorable children and pets; making it all the more irresistible for children to even divert their minds from these advertisements. These children viewing such enamouring commercials get drawn towards these advertisements which come with their latest versions to further distract the children from doing their studies, for instance, Barbie Dolls, play stations, Lego toys.

To sum up, I truly believe in banning of misleading as well as excessive advertisements, as it would definitely land up with the children forming unhealthy eating habits as well as poor in their academics due to continuously watching an array of useless advertisements

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 160, Rule ID: NEITHER_NOR[1]
Message: Use 'nor' with neither.
Suggestion: nor
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45454545455 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13950190303 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594405594406 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 120.003806524 49.4020404114 243% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 173.333333333 106.682146367 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7777777778 20.7667163134 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8888888889 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186644819372 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076688496001 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389451646688 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111739372067 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282058638592 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 50.2224549098 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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