Some people say that international sports events make an important contribution to world peace.Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people say that international sports events make an important contribution to world peace.
Do you agree or disagree?

There is no gainsaying that given topic attracts immediate attention owing to its uniqueness. International sports events and their importance has always been a heated debate across the globe. One group of people assert on the importance as it brings peace among different countries while other group of people find it meaningless and waste of money and time. In my opinion I completely agree to the first opinion as having the international sports events certainly has many advantages intact to it. Before reaching to final verdict let’s discuss both views in detail.
To begin with, having an international sports event bring enormous advantage to the host country. First and foremost the economic stability. Being the host country of the event, more people visit the country and its different places that eventually bring incremental growth in economy. Furthermore, such events reduces the heat among different countries that exists due to certain other affairs. These events helps bringing multicultural masses at one platform, increasing interactions. Host country gets the opportunity to showcase their culture, traditions to the whole world. Opening up arms to the world to get familiar with their country’s values and level of hospitality.
To elucidate it further, there are numerous job opportunities introduced due to the event that also eventually helps controlling unemployment. All these factors contribute to the eternal peace at global level.
To recapitulate the aforementioned argument, these events bring along many benefits not only to the host country but also to the world as a whole provided these events are conducted in their true essence. Any disadvantage to this phenomenon are negligible as compared to humongous merits.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 410, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'help'.
Suggestion: help
... to certain other affairs. These events helps bringing multicultural masses at one pl...
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Line 2, column 416, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to bring' or 'bring'.
Suggestion: to bring; bring
...rtain other affairs. These events helps bringing multicultural masses at one platform, i...
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Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to control' or 'control'.
Suggestion: to control; control
...to the event that also eventually helps controlling unemployment. All these factors contrib...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, while, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50922509225 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97817298087 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605166051661 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5592909441 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3125 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9375 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196370849732 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597140545499 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565758455266 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109425157008 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503197973528 0.056905535591 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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