Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to preoccupy themselves.
Discuss both these views and and give your opinion.
Whether if children should take part in organised group activities during their free time or to preoccupy themselves is explicated i.e. analysed and presented in great detail below.
On the one hand, since offspring have more idle time when compared to adolescents, they should involve in group activities at schools as this will improve their cognitive behaviour. What does it mean? All younger ones do not have the same enthusiasm or intelligence to learn new things. But when a group of kids join together with a mission to: organise volunteering work e.g. removing debris from school playgrounds, collecting charities for the Halloween or making handicrafts to sell them to feed the poor and finally, join as scouts; their co-ordination with each other will improve, they will communicate better, and their perceptions and reasoning skills related to tasks and situations will enhance as they will solve problems by asking doubts and giving suggestions between members. Hence, parents naturally be willing to allow their children to participate in such activities.
On the other hand, progeny like to hang around with their parents or play on their own. Since they do not know how to pass time, parents can help them find a suitable hobby e.g. they could be admitted into sports club where they can learn golf, swimming, chess and other activities. Another way to nurture their intelligence is by introducing them to computers or by assigning them science projects so that they can engross in learning technology which can metamorphose their future, meaning, they could completely change from average students to future geniuses if they work on something right from their early ages.
In conclusion, on must have understood from the above that my opinions on both of the views is supportive as this aids in personality development.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 240, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to golf'
Suggestion: to golf
...d into sports club where they can learn golf, swimming, chess and other activities. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, e.g., finally, hence, if, so, thus, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23232323232 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75500305489 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632996632997 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 134.409858269 49.4020404114 272% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 155.4 106.682146367 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255255251813 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10376949105 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0846540775361 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162782622517 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0983795308773 0.056905535591 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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