Some people spend a lot of money attending cultural or sports events. Is it a good or a bad thing? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.
Nowadays, people are interested to spend money for their interests. Purchasing tickets to attend cultural and sporting events are not always have bad effects, it also has positive aside. I am going to discuss about the benefits and drawbacks on this topic and place my opinion.
In the first place, sporting or cultural events are benefit to local business. When an event is held in the place, people are not only spend money for tickets. They purchase about transports, meals, souvenirs and accommodations. For instance, One of famous cultural event, which held in Seoul every year on August, is hitted 1 million people a year. Moreover, for arrange this event employ staffs and local businesses get busy. The event host reported the impact of this event has 2 billion dollor economic effectiveness. Therefore It is helpful to local economy.
In the second place, It gives to experience it lively. By Television or Internet, we can easily watch sports games and support sport team. However, the sporting event presenting remarkable ambience is epic in the stadium. People who experienced this atmosphere look forward to watch another game. This will affect the league or market of sport bigger.
Nonetheless, There are few drawbacks in this topic. Sports or culture events are take short term. Therefore, employees are not given stable workplaces. Also, some people are getting addicted their income like betting on sports events. If it is overmeaning about these events, we could missing aim of events.
In conclusions, in my view, spends money on cultural or sporting events is valuable thing such as entertainment in modern days.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, moreover, nonetheless, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my view, in the first place, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18796992481 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66532604287 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.624060150376 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.2920918329 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.7142857143 106.682146367 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.6666666667 20.7667163134 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95238095238 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209223679151 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606078329662 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531125614199 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134098045996 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417898870696 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.0946893788 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 50.2224549098 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.93 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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