over the last few decades people are not interested to spend money on sporting or cultural events. But these days people are ready to incur part of their income on musical concerts ,sporting and cultural events. In this context I'm going to discuss about the benefits and drawbacks on this before drawing cogent solution.
To begin with,these days people are ready to spend part of their income on sport and cultural events for entertainment, which is very essential these days. Because they are facing lot of stress in their personal and professional front. For instance, a survey conducted on stress and anger management says entertainment occupied a major role in terms of reducing stress.
Another significant factor is, some conventional type of cultural events are vanished over a period of time. And the artists are unable to survive and find difficult to meet their both ends. These days the artists and players are gaining attention. For instance, the government conducted a sports event, the vision of the event is to bring out the rural young talent. The players gained attention with this event and the profits of this event are invested on poor people. So, These kind of events are helpful for the poor and needy people.
Nevertheless, There are few drawbacks with this, Some people are incurring most of their income on these events like betting and some events the people are getting addicted with these. There is a saying "too much is good for nothing" , so too much of anything is not good.
To sum up, In my perception investing money on sport and cultural events is not waste of money they are gaining entertainment. And, entertainment plays a vital role in ones life and act as stress busters to reduce the stress.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, nevertheless, so, for instance, kind of, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94915254237 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59262312488 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522033898305 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0037800115 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.25 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4375 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264871792511 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0844207798659 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855711179748 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156549294944 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.098776607512 0.056905535591 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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