Some people suppose that men are naturally endowed with a more competitive spirit than women. Although I believe males are more driven than their female counterparts, I will not accept the point that the males possess the inborn trait rather, they acquire it because of the way they are raised.
Obviously, more successful people around the world are men. This is because of the fact that they are perceived as strong and smart by society, which in turn influencing them to take risks and be victorious. For example, men CEOs accounted for 90% of the fortune 500 companies, and the rate that the percentage is expected to decrease 50 years down the line is considerably low, according to Forbes International. Thus, the superficial perception of the success of the men displays as men is inherently competitive.
When it comes to women, they are naturally less competitive than males because they are fundamentally taught to be safe and secure, and restricted to take risks. To illustrate this, right from birth, a majority of the females in many parts of the world are treated so preciously that they would not be allowed to take even small risks. Growing up like that, many of them are unwilling to come out of their comfort zones, leading them to be less successful. Moreover, in other areas, females are prohibited to have a professional degree or employment. All these points can conclude that the nature of being competitive is rather influenced by the community.
In conclusion, it is believed that men have an innate ability to have more driven spirit than women. However, even though successful people are more of men, the statement is completely wrong because it, not the inborn capability that makes them more ambitious but the way they are brought up in society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... it because of the way they are raised. Obviously, more successful people around...
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Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...eople around the world are men. This is because of the fact that they are perceived as strong and smart ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, moreover, so, thus, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1480.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93333333333 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73702190143 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553333333333 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9752547222 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.846153846 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229340814405 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969629422658 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113082319044 0.0667982634062 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156162114295 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682275278116 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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