The table below gives information about salaries of secondary high school teachers in five countries in 2009

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The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009.

The bar chart compares teachers’ salaries in secondary/ high schools in five different countries in 2009. Overall, Australian teachers had the lowest average salaries however took less time to reach top salaries than their counterparts, except those in Denmark. By contrast, teachers in Luxembourg earn the highest average income but spent quite a lot of time to achieve top salaries. Regarding Australian teachers and Denmark teachers, the annual and the maximum salaries were equal.
secondary/high school Japanese teachers starting salaries were the lowest, at $28.000, however, their annual income was higher than those in Australia, with $48.000. Similarly, their maxim income was also higher than those in Denmark, with $62.400 compared to $54.000. The highest average income for teachers was recorded in Luxembourg with $80.000 at the beginning, this number for the maximum was $139.000, which doubled in Denmark. Nevertheless, the years taken to reach top salaries for teachers in Luxembourg was higher, with 30 years.
Starting salaries of Korean teachers only stood at fourth place($35.000), however the figures for the annual and maximum salaries stood at third place ($52.000) and second ($84.500) place, respectively. In addition, It took Korean teachers 37 years to earn top salaries, which is the longest time on the table. The average income of Australian and Denmark teachers was quite low, yet, they only spent 9 years and 8 years respectively to reach top salaries.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS General Training

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondary
...l and the maximum salaries were equal. secondary/high school Japanese teachers starting ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, second, similarly, so, third, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1237.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 230.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37826086957 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65761736462 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 176.041082164 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508695652174 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 351.9 506.74238477 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.2529282785 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.454545455 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9090909091 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.18181818182 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196323843193 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103272491377 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125334006494 0.0667982634062 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153844333685 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0889195837603 0.056905535591 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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