These days many children spend a lot of their time playing computer games but little time doing sports Why is this Do you think it is a positive or negative development

Essay topics:

These days many children spend a lot of their time playing computer games but little time doing sports. Why is this? Do you think
it is a positive or negative development?

The massive development in science and technology has affected the lives of all the age-groups. The young generation of this modern age
is highly involved in computer-oriented leisure time activities instead of outdoor games. The advancement in technology and the increase in
urbanization are major reasons for this emerging trend. In my opinion, this is a negative development, as it can affect the mental and physical growth of children.

Firstly, the lack of playgrounds obliges the children to get involved in indoor games. In other words, with the rapid increase in the urbanization, most of the areas are transformed into buildings, leaving no space for children to play. For instance, in a recent survey by local
NGO, the majority of the newly constructed societies in Gurugram do not have sufficient playing areas, consequently, leading to a little percentage of children involved in outdoor sports. Secondly, the security of children is another crucial factor considered by parents for not allowing the children to play outside. In addition, to secure the offsprings from external threats, people provide them with all the facilities and gadgets inside the home.

However, this trend can have detrimental effects on a child's physical and psychological development. Primarily, gazing the computer screens for prolonged hours
can cause an adverse effect on the eyes and can also lead to poor grades. Furthermore, the excessive sitting and lack of physical activity can result in serious medical illness such as obesity. To exemplify, the government of the USA, recently shown their concern for the coming generation as every second child in their
nation is obese, due to the inactivity caused by extreme usage of electronic games. Next, little participation in physical sports make the child
lethargic and dump, additionally, the more involvement in indoor games decreases the concentration and learning capabilities of youngsters.

In conclusion, although computer games are sources of entertainment for most of the children, however, nothing productive is gained from these activities.
Therefore, I strongly opine that over-engagement of upcoming generation in technical gadgets can prove very harmful for their overall growth and development.

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Average: 6 (5 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 91, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5838150289 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11090618818 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595375722543 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0594081789 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.75 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9375 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 11.0 4.38176352705 251% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183024305061 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531952257462 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401368778622 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0625257476695 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367324400853 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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