These days people are living into their 90s and beyond. As a result, there is increasing concern about care for the elderly.
Do you think it is the responsibility of the family to care for their elderly members or should the government be held responsible?
There is a concern about the responsibility for the elderly. Some social workers suggest that it is the government to be obliged for this, while some medics advocate that relatives can fulfill better. This essay agrees with the idea of making relatives obligatory.
Let us start with the reasons why some social workers state that children are responsible for their parents, when they become old. The first reason is that the elderly used to take care of them before they got older. Aged members normally nurtured young ones, when they were immature, so now that they become grown-up, they should serve their parents in return. Another reason is that none can look after their relatives better than their children. People, who are unrelated to the family, cannot provide the same care as family members, so the best nurses are relatives. Furthermore, older people can care for their grandchildren. Grandparents commonly help working relatives by giving parental care to their young members, which is beneficial to the whole family.
However, some doctors believe that the government should look after the aging generation. Firstly, mature members have little time for their grandparents. The current generation are usually busy with work and, consequently, cannot pay sufficient attention to their older parents, so the government should become accountable for them in providing the normal standards of life. Secondly, it can provide the timely medical aid. The authorities may supply the older generation with medical treatment, when they feel either sick or heart attack, which can hardly be secured by the close people at home. Moreover, the retired used to contribute the economy. The state officials should take care of the retired in case children refuse to do this, because they contributed to its growth in the past.
In conclusion, although some hospital workers claim that the government should be made liable for older citizens, I think that family members should take be in charge of caring for their the aging relatives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 660, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to work' or 'work'.
Suggestion: to work; work
...andchildren. Grandparents commonly help working relatives by giving parental care to th...
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Line 7, column 114, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hould be made liable for older citizens, I think that family members should take ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24770642202 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57037959748 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550458715596 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4002690102 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3333333333 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330416667851 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112278313657 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104028049612 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221071003558 0.151304729494 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590860276569 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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