In the time past, photographers used to give us real images of people and places. Nowadays it is difficult to trust what they give us
Is this a negative or positive development ?
Never before have images of individuals and locations been altered by photographers than at the present. I strongly believe that this modern development is hugely detrimental to security, health and personality of the people; although if we believe some, it has a side benefit.
With increasing photo-editing skills comes a growing photography industry. As photographers are changing skin tone as well as beautifying the background locations, making images increasingly appealing to audience, people are making use of their services, probably because this development often brings people's imaginations close to reality. This eventually creates jobs for people, which is an advantage.
However, this development is not without its disadvantages, too. For one, a person's identity is mostly bound up in facial shape, hair style, nose length etc. If such body organs of people are continually edited in almost every image, it can lead to faulty identity, which may hinder many security agencies from identifying people and performing their duty: keeping the people and society safe. For another, there seems to be constant pressure on many youths, especially females, to conform with the illusional images of skinny models that photographers alter and present to us on magazines, so they often choose to starve themselves instead of consuming enough food. If this were not true, there would not be an upsurge in the number of eating-disorder patients in our hospitals. Finally, images used to assist in telling realistic stories that audience can relate almost immediately with. But it seems people are now associating with false ideas as unrealistic images are deceiving them. Therefore, the personality of a reasonable number of individuals is being underdeveloped due to altered images.
In conclusion, some may believe that altering people and places in pictures is justified, but I think photographs should be presented to us in their original quality rather than edited.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51147540984 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04056600906 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652459016393 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.3552211485 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.071428571 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7857142857 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195535523874 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578328243487 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431307117007 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115957405314 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222105223824 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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