Feedback is a method for us to make us better by remembering what aspect in our work can be improved. My Boss always asks us employee to give feedback to each other. He requires us to give negative feedback FIRST, for we can get message briefly and can abstract information easily. However, I, strongly recommend that we should give both positive and negative feedback with positive first.
First of all, with positive feedback first, they can take the feedback more resultful. When we talk about their advantages, they will in a good mood. With such mood, they acknowledge that their efforts have been known, so they will know I have totally understand what they did. So, they are more likely to read through the whole feedback. Also, they are less likely to feel embarrassed when I talk about their weakness, instead, they might be grateful to me because we point out that their drawbacks and aspects for improvement. On the contrary, if we do not talk about their advantages first, they might not want to read the feedback at all, and our advise might be ignored totally.
In addition, we are more likely to avoid the same error when we get negative feedback later. That is because people tend to have a deep impression of the ending of a series of things, such as essay and feedback. If we compose a essay with wonderful ending, we usually get a higher score. Similarly, we can make a deep impression about what we gave in the feedback. According to a survey conducted by Nanjing University, about 80 percent participants can remember what the last paragraph means that they recent read. So, if we want to make our view more impressive, we should put it in the last paragraph. Further on, with such impressive negative feedback, they are more likely to remember what we advised in their feedback, and they are easily to avoid the same mistake.
In conclusion, although we can get quickly and briefly information in the feedback if we write the negative part first, we should bring the positive part to the front of the feedback. Not only it can be accepted by others easily, but also is a reminder to avoid making the same mistake that we already made.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 253, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'understood'.
Suggestion: understood
...known, so they will know I have totally understand what they did. So, they are more likely...
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Line 3, column 652, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[3]
Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
...nt to read the feedback at all, and our advise might be ignored totally. In additi...
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Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ch as essay and feedback. If we compose a essay with wonderful ending, we usually...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, however, if, similarly, so, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52368832665 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465789473684 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4371058593 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36842105263 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159119532078 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690965717658 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611017072425 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116743331783 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628208520625 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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