4. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The university will spend money on dormitory to improve the life quality of students, which of the following do you think is the best way?
1. Providing a room for quiet study;
2. Building an exercise room;
3. Providing entertainment place (watch film).
Dormitory, where students spend most of their time when in the school, is a place that should be highly valued because it not only stands for the quality of the school but also represent the quality of students’ life. Among three possible improvements on the school dormitory-providing a room for quiet study, building an exercise room, and providing entertainment place-I personally believe that providing entertainment place may be the best way.
First, an entertainment place is a good place for students to socialize so that they can expand their circle of friends. A lot of campuses are located in rural areas, where students may find it very hard to find somewhere to have fun together. At the same time, an entertainment place in the dormitory offers students a chance to find something interesting to do with a group of friends or schoolmates. As a result, students must be inclined to go there due to the fact that they cannot find anywhere else to develop their hobbies or interests and that it is convenient to just go downstairs and enjoy something entertaining. When more and more students go there to have fun together, the place turns to be a particularly excellent place for students to socialize because students, with possibility to meet every kind of people in the campus, are likely to find someone who shares the same interests with themselves. In this case, students can all expand their circle of friends in a direct and convenient way.
Second, a good environment in the entertainment place can allow students to release pressure from heavy school work. It is obvious that the whole atmosphere, including good sound effects, good visual effects, and perfect lighting suitable for watching movies, in the entertainment place serving to offer students a place to watch movies is excellent. Thus, students, with such good atmospheric effects, may feel comfortable because they have been all the time under so stressful school life. In this case, they are likely to release their pressure after having classes for hours, preparing presentations for days, and getting ready for finals for weeks.
In brief, I am highly convinced that building an entertainment place in the dormitory is the best choice among these three possible constructions due to the fact that it gives students an opportunity to enjoy social life and that such a place prevents students from being stressed out in their school life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 655, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and getting ready for finals for weeks. In brief, I am highly convinced that bui...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, thus, in brief, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09975062344 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90931076953 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476309226933 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.4421267948 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.307692308 100.406767564 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8461538462 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144865820578 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601091351512 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622343931256 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109544744037 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613668990937 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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