The Benefits of living in other cities and towns
Perhaps no subject in the worls is as likely to cause much controversy as personal descisions that people make, does. An issu in dispute is that whether people should live in one town or city all their life or move from one place to another. Some people advocate that it's better not to change your living location as much as possible, while opponents suggest that shifting your living place from time to time is a great descision. In my opinion, leaving your town and expriencing new cities is a great resolution for two reasons.
First and foremost, changing your living location would broaden your horizon. Living in new places means new enviroment, atmosphere, people, expriences and opportunities. For example, before I went to university when I was eighteen years old, I spent my whole life in Kerman, An semi-arid city in southeast Iran. Kerman's population is about 100,000 people and its economy is based on agriculture, So most people there have a farm or livestocks. Kerman climate is cold and dry. However, after my success in university entrance exam, I was accepted in Sharif University of Technology which is located in Tehran, the capital city of Iran. The population of Tehran exceeds twelve million people and it has an industrial economy with humid climate. Therefore, living in Tehran was a great challenge for me because it was totally diffrent enviroment in comparison to Kerman. I tend to go to theater plays and cinemas that I were deprived of in Kerman. I tended to get new friends that we had many things in common. My best friend now is my roomate. we were both keen on reading science fiction books and we updated each other on the topic every week by inroducing new books and comics to each other. None of these rich new oppurtunities would have happend to me if I didn't choose to come to Tehran.
Second, it provides better career choice for people. Every city and town has its own microeconomy, needs and jobs. Back to my prior example, Studying in Tehran provided me with a better education and far better career choices. Infact, i studied mechanical engineering in Sharif University of Technology and with the help of my kind advisor I tended to find a job as a mechanical designer in a comapany that produced gas turbines. The salary of the job was soo good that I bought a car and Rent a private studio for myself. Consequently, I gained my financial independence in the age of twenty while my friends in Kerman were working on the fields growing crops. After I saved enough money, I started my own company with my friends in the field of designing propulsion systems for aircrafts. As you can see, living in Tehran chaneged the course of my life drasticaly in a good way. That's why I'm positive that moving to a new city would pave the way for future success.
From what has been discussed above one can reasc a conclusion that shifting to a new location is a great idea due the broadening effects that it has on people's horizon and better career choices that it provides. Finally, I suggest governments to support universities by introducing stimulative fundings so they can supply their students with free dormitory and food, so more students choose to live in other cities for their further education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2684.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 563.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76731793961 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67966439271 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 212.727598566 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522202486679 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 858.6 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0203020007 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8571428571 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1071428571 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78571428571 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185115002395 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461393467147 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592793360163 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121959339721 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451593681097 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 86.8835125448 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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