Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of humanity, humans need to be together with others to avoid solitude and improve interpersonal, communication, and social skills. The family is the first community in which a person is placed. The question which arises here is, should we extend our family or not? Some people opt for the former one; however, on the other extreme of the rope, others might deem that the latter might carries more weight. Personally, I believe an extended family is a must, and everyone needs to make robust relationships among members of the family. I fell this way for two reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
As the first and paramount reason, the family is the primary school for everyone, and each member of the family can be one teacher. If this school has more teachers, you learn more about aspects of life. So, extended family is vital to prepare for being a member of the community in the future. For example, when you in an extended family and your maintenance of family relationships, it helps you to become open-mind because you were familiar with different minds about matters that happened in lives. This enables you to improve your relationships in other parts of life, such as at the workplace, university, and among your friends. Another positive ramification resulting from having an extended family is if something goes wrong for one member, affects all members indirectly, and hence that persons inside a family help each other. So, having a close and intimate relationship with members of the family, such as grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles, it is of vital importance.
Secondly, and the latest reasons that come to my mind alongside the first viewpoint elaborated above, with the development of the humans' modern society, more and more people tend to be all alone, and this tendency maybe not an inner desire, perhaps! I mean that it is a circumstance that imposes it on us. So, everyone is inevitably exposed to experience solitude life in today's modern lifestyle, and It is growing exponentially, especially among young people. The worst part of the story is taken place when the young people after marriage do not have the incentive to have children and extended inner family become lesser more and more than it was in the past. Such changes compared to the past can inevitably bring about psychiatric diseases into society. For instance, "Only Children" syndrome had been introduced by researchers, and they warn about it. This syndrome has been shown with children without siblings. Researchers describe only children as selfish/self-absorbed, maladjusted, antisocial, and lonely. In this sense, today, a person with a big family have better mental health than the person who does not have family assistance.
To recapitulate, by following all of the aforementioned reasons into consideration, I believe the extended family in our lives has a crucial role now than it was in the past. This is because stress and problems in our lives have increased, so we need the support of our family.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The extended family grandparents cousins aunts and uncles is less important now than it was in the past Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 83
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 31, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i mean, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2546.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04158415842 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88892228579 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508910891089 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 822.6 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0830324159 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.695652174 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9565217391 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17391304348 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192287325528 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559126541214 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053295222775 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124200609309 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358813090096 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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