Do you agree or disagree with the following statement
The extended family ( grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past ?
being connected to the family and having each other back is one of the blessings in life. They teach you most of the values and morals you need in life to be a perfect human. However, some people think that extend family like ( grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. But, from my point of view, I disagree with that. Actually, I believe that the bond is much stronger now than ever.
I feel this for several reasons.
to begin with, reaching to them is much easier now. To illustrate more I will give an example of my own experience. With the great revolution of technology and social media, now I get to converse more with my extended family through WhatsApp, Skype, and Facebook Every week, we have a family conference call, where we always share our new updates and celebrate our success and not to forget to mention we always are there for each other in needed times, not like old times, before the inventions of these greats online applications, we used to meet only during holidays. In addition transportation is one great factor that helps families to gather, for instance, my cousin Raina who lives in a city that is 9 hours away by car from my house, so it was always a very long exhausting trip for her to come and visit, so she used to come twice a year, but now after Building a new domestic airport in town, traveling become an amazing and joyful experience with only one-hour Duration flight, and now I get to see her more often. Last but not least, the strength of the bond between family members is always about how you have been raised, and what family exactly means to you. The person himself can priorities the relationship with the extended family.
To sum up, i am a strong believer in family values and the importance of keeping it tight, whether it's a first-degree family or extended one. That's why i never see it as less important, in fact, I am very convinced that it is much stronger now, and it will keep getting stronger till the end of life.
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...ome people think that extend family like grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, so, for instance, i feel, in addition, in fact, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49184782609 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44492591874 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58152173913 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 132.744114747 48.9658058833 271% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 118.071428571 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2857142857 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270425839833 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901260802232 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771233542973 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14403859197 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107854607273 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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