Do you agree or disagree with following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Human, with the seemingly unquenchable thirst for the information and communications, always try to increase their technology to gain such requirements, inasmuch as, in the new decade, we are witnesses of high improving in communications science that caused, our world have been known by the term global village. Although development in communications science has brought us a lot of benefits, create some serious problems in personal privacy, specially celebrities, that some of them are hailed as heroes’ people and people want to know more about their personal life. The question which arises here is celebrities deserve to have more privacy than they have now or not. Some people opt for the former one; however, others might deem that the latter might carries more weight. I, for one, the latter attitude carries more weight. In what follow I will aptly substantiate my viewpoint.
The foremost reason coming to mind as the first is that with developed technology and increased accessibility to large amount information, personal information had been be in danger in order to protect personal information, a lot of countries parliament enacted a number of laws, called Citizenship Acts. For example, according one of the acts of this low, if anyone tries to publish any private information about a person without her/his permission, s/he is guilty and will be punished. These days with improving technology and establish some modern software and hardware, surveillance on news and information have been increased. More surveillance, less crime commits. Owning to the facts that, todays, personal privacy is more protectable than before and famous persons like athletes and celebrities live in more civilized society.
Furthermore, there is another reason which deserve some word here, contrary of popular belief, some celebrities like to publish personal information and personal pictures in order to be in top of the news and growing their popularity. It is easy for celebrities to avoid the paparazzi if they want but many celebrities work with the paparazzi. Hollywood has many famous celebrities never work with paparazzi none more so than Brad Pitt and on the other extreme of the rope, there are many celebrities that have worked with paparazzi. As a result, publishing private information of celebrities broadly depend on themselves and their politics.
All in all, by taking all of the aforementioned ideas into consideration, it can be easily upholding that, nowadays with developing technology in all fields specially communications science, although transferring information and news is getting easier, with increased surveillance on news and enacted stricter law, our privacy has been protected more than before.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 170, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...ormation, personal information had been be in danger in order to protect personal ...
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Line 3, column 363, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
... with the paparazzi. Hollywood has many famous celebrities never work with paparazzi none more so ...
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Line 4, column 23, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... their politics. All in all, by taking all of the aforementioned ideas into consideration...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2314.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43192488263 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04168472629 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539906103286 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.0280243023 48.9658058833 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.625 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.625 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182950701482 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679686499322 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768090159782 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110485299218 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308454928527 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 10.002688172 205% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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