Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For the future career success, is relating well to other people more important than studying hard at school?
In modern society, in the wake of intense competition in work, more and more people pursue future career success, but what is the critical determinant of success has puzzled them for a long time. Some people believe that relating well to other people play a more vital role in work. As far as I am concerned, studying hard at school is no less important than the good interpersonal relationship. And I will elaborate this in the following paragraphs.
On the one hand, just because society attaches great importance to being relating well to others does not mean relating well to others is good for nothing. you can be equipped with fundamental knowledge after studying hard. To some extent, the essence contained within all the school subjects just resembles the concrete frames of architecture, and it is high time for students studied industriously during their school time. Therefore, there is no excuse for any students to shun the most fundamental tasks of studying. A good example in this point is the achievements of astronomy of human beings, which derive from the hard work of scientists who have a solid foundation of related subjects during their school life. The precise calculation and models illustrate their basic skills in physics, math, chemistry, etc. And if any theoretical mistakes appear during the work, the final consequence can’t be imagined. Up to now, we have stepped on the moon, and the exploration of universe out of solar system is taking into consideration. Evidently, these unprecedented successes are owned to their untiring efforts at school.
On the other hand, in many occasions, having good interpersonal relationship with others will benefit you a lot. Only through interaction with others can we master the art of cooperation. This vividly demonstrates the significance of relating well to others. For business people, it is pivotal to build a business network based on the interpersonal relationship, otherwise some crucial opportunities to build a cooperation relationship can be easily ignored. Moreover, an extraordinary interpersonal relationship also does them a favor of when struggling in economic crisis. Imagine such a scene that you owe a big company, if you lack the ability to being relating well with your employees and your partners in business, it will be difficult for you to listen to their inner voices, finally leading to the failure. This dramatic effect depicts the value of harmoniously work.
From what has been discussed above, we can easily draw a conclusion that studying hard at school and being related to others are the same important to take into consideration while pursuing success in a career. Every single day spent on campus is supposed to be made full use of, as the essential period of one’s life definitely constitutes a cornerstone to a brighter future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 157, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: You
...ing well to others is good for nothing. you can be equipped with fundamental knowle...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2393.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17965367965 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00385567712 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562770562771 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 756.9 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8327823664 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.772727273 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.59090909091 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368158231916 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929110527712 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081592231526 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231065228983 0.150856017488 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0966877722335 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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