From the past few years there has been great advancement in defence services as these are well equipped now and pay long-term benefits. Some people advise that youngsters should serve their country by opting jobs like air force and military. As far as I am concerned to this issue , i am on the same wavelength with them on this matter.
To kick off, it is no exaggeration to say that incorporating in National services is a symbol of pride as you are respected and loved for your unmatchable services. Thus, more youngsters should be enrolled in these jobs because they are warm blooded and highly pro -active. As a result, they can render more productive environment by the bravery acts and the dominance on terrorists. Moreover, most of the young people nowadays are indulged in frivolous activities and confronting unemployment , this leads them either to crime or drugs . Therefore, to the best exploitation of their potential is to recruit them in community services.
Furthermore, it is apparent that new generation are the children of global village. This means their ideas and logical thinking will bring plethora of advancement in the existing curriculum. Besides this, it is no disputing the fact that young people are the future of any nation. In any case, if the go off the rails and get more into malignant activities , they can become the shackles in the world's progression. Hence, all the youngster should be motivated to get employed in National services . However, seniors can bestow their valuable experience to the trainees but their retirement age should be earlier so they could not obstruct the youngsters vecancy.
To recapitulate, according to above preceding discussion , I am highly inclined to my notion . Eventually, in my opinion , Government should revise the pattern of the education and instill the sense of patriotism in youngsters so they can grow with these values and dedication.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, well, as a result, in any case, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10828025478 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91440723484 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601910828025 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.9828581638 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.25 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118984053688 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0374209748571 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466709720389 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0696036471859 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.011958544373 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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