Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades encourage students to learn. Use specific example and reasons to explain your opinion
Learning is a lifelong process. Basic learning experience comes from school education. The main purpose of the school education should be providing knowledge to students; but these days, students’ main concern became their grades rather than knowledge. In my opinion, grades do not encourage students to learn, but instead, it depresses them, and even sometimes force them to cheat in exams.
First, the main disadvantage of grades is that it demotivates students in an exam. Due to fear of low grades students get depression. Students try to get good grades because they know that only good grades can help them to get admission to top universities. Moreover, after graduating from top universities, chances of getting a good job are higher. When students get depressed because of their failure, they choose the wrong path in life, such as suicide. For example, I studied in Physical Therapy school form Rajiv Gandhi University, India. Students from social study department done a research project on the suicide rates in youngsters and its causes. The research study showed that out of whole numbers of the suicide of youngsters, seventeen percent of attempted suicide because of failure during their education. That was an eye-opening result. Thus, the university conducted motivational seminars, regarding educational motivation and help to overcome life problems, for all students of all departments.
Second, students try their best to get excellent grades. When they fail they choose other paths which damage their future, such as cheating in exams or addiction to drugs. India has a big black market to get good grades in the exam. It is one type scam which helps students to get admission or clear an exam for a job, etc. For that, students or their parents pay huge money to get good scores. Further, cheating in an exam and guilt of failure attracts students towards bed influences, such as drugs, alcohol, etc. For instance, my friend Manish is not really a brilliant student, however, his parents want him to be a doctor. Thus, he studied hard to get admission in B. J. Medical college for bachelor's in medicines and surgery. Unfortunately, he did not get the required grades for admission. He tried indirectly through the black market to get admission in college. He failed in that try, and he lost his money as well during the scam process. He got so much demotivated and started taking drugs. Fortunately, his parents found out early about his addiction, and they helped him to come out from his addiction. He almost took more than a year to overcome his addiction.
Let’s put in the nutshell, in daily life people do not need any grades to justify their knowledge. Students should be able to practically imply their knowledge that is the main purpose of education. I strongly believe that grades are demotivating students from learning, and it leads them to bad influences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 950, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... money as well during the scam process. He got so much demotivated and started tak...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, really, regarding, second, so, thus, well, even so, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2433.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07933194154 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75998755511 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526096033403 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6452455775 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.03125 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.96875 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125326088407 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372944339904 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04234944699 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102606658679 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489182920822 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.59 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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