Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better to study science in university than to study the arts.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
Colleges and universities are places where students receive a variety of information, form their own social circles, and exchange ideas. I am totatlly agains the idea that universities should focus more on science than on the arts. In my opinion, studying science and arts are equally important, and students should spend equal amount of time in each field. The following paragraphs provide reasons that examine my thoughts.
First and foremost, university students are in the age of preparing to enter society, so they should expand their knowledge to experience and learn as many different things as possible. In fact, adults in society nowadays should possess certain skills in order to tackle with all the different tasks: fixing worn-out housing equipment, decorating their own gardens, driving their kids to schools, etc; fixing broken apparatus requires certain science background and embellishing the gardens also necessitate basic arts skills such as cutting and painting. Not to mention, without these fundamental life skills, human beings cannot live by themselves. As a result, students ought to seize the opportunities they still have before entering society. They should be exposed to ideas and opinions within different fields, not only to science and arts. For example, my uncle engaged in eleven different clubs while in college, and he also double majored in biology and art history; this allowed him to become well-rounded as an adult. He fixes all dilapidated equipment in his house and does the lawns all by himself.
What's more, companies and graduate schools today put strong emphasis on works and activities of each applicant. These institutions would prefer candidates that partake in various activities; they are less likely to accept individuals who only specialize in certain area. Instead, these schools and firms would like to see colorful resumes; for example, as my counsin applied to medical schools in her junior year in college, she listed all the activities and works that she had done in the past. She is extremely curious and talented. She exposed hersefl to as many activities as she possibly could; she was the captain of the volleyball team, the leading researcher at her immunology lab, the teaching assistant for his organic chemistry professor, the champion of the school's arts contest, and a leader of a fundraising event. She not only excelled in science and arts, but she also gained significant recognition in many other fields; all professors loved her and wrote her extraordinary letters of recommendation. Eventually, she was proudly accepted to 16 medical schools out of the 20 schools that she applied for, including Harvrd medical school, Yale medical school, Standford medical school, etc.
To sum up, the statement is not as persuasive as it stands. Based on expositions proposed in the previous paragraphs, including the requirements of various skills in the future as an adult and the emphasis all the institutions put on, studying science and the arts are of equal importance.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ir knowledge to experience and learn as many different things as possible. In fact, adults in ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...use and does the lawns all by himself. Whats more, companies and graduate schools to...
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Line 3, column 829, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t, and a leader of a fundraising event. She not only excelled in science and arts, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, well, while, for example, in fact, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2555.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27892561983 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78744890944 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568181818182 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.2177782262 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.75 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0776740691653 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0266996188879 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0270191337385 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0646084683193 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413581110102 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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