Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to make friends with people who can have fun with us than to make friends with people who can help us when we are in need.
People get many opportunities to meet others on various occasions, such as in schools, workplaces, and at parties. When they socialize in these places, they are more inclined to have conversations if they share similar habits, interests, or lifestyles. And some of them will eventually turn out to be acquaintances and then friends. On the other hand, some people are purpose-driven and consider friendship a formal or professional partnership with others who agree to offer support based on oral promises or written contracts that emphasize mutual benefits. In my experience, after making friends with both types of people, I believe having friends that can have fun together is more important to me than having friends in need.
First, having fun with friends makes my life happier. Their optimistic attitudes lift my spirit and ease my suffering in this competitive and unprecedented world. One of them was Tom, a music student I met at an orientation for international students when I was still a freshman at Temple University. I didn't have a knack for music like him, but as a student majoring in psychology, I was curious about what kind of emotions a song might evoke through different notes. When I brought up this topic with him after we had introduced each other in the greeting section of the orientation, he had the witty idea that sometimes it was better to feel the music with your heart than to analyze it with science. Since then, we have become very close friends, hanging out together, sharing the music we love or dislike, and turning our chests toward each other without any hidden thoughts. These joys and the good times we spent together can not exist in a relationship that labels friends as human resources.
Secondly, thanks to the friends I made through sports clubs, my body and brain have been kept in good condition. We often neglect our health issues as we live in a competitive world where people focus too much on producing practical results. I was one of them until I met friends in a hip-hop dance club. Practicing choreography with them for a few hours a week benefited my mind and body since it increased my stamina and made me happy. Furthermore, even after I graduated from college and left the club, we kept in touch and reminded each other to stay positive and keep fit. If I hadn't met these people in the club, I wouldn't have trained my body and kept optimistic even under pressure or in adverse times.
In short, having fun with friends plays a vital role in keeping my body and mind healthy. Meanwhile, we can be true to them and gain emotional support from each other.
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- TOEFL Writing Test Test 1 2022 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 304, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...till a freshman at Temple University. I didnt have a knack for music like him, but as...
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Line 5, column 584, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...her to stay positive and keep fit. If I hadnt met these people in the club, I wouldnt...
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Line 5, column 622, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...I hadnt met these people in the club, I wouldnt have trained my body and kept optimisti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, while, as to, in short, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2169.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7880794702 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70403657692 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565121412804 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8726999436 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.45 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.65 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316342213825 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911656570058 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100067842707 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203371790615 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071552640905 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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