do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The job has a greater effect on one's overall happiness than the social life does.
Having a job in modern society is part of the life, which everyone has a need to it, but experts believe that occasionally the job has a negative effect on the life. Well, we should know that having strong social life can change our life and causes we have a great time. As far as I concerned, I agree with the second prospective that social life is important than the job. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated hereunder.
To begin with, basically, doing job causes that we forget bad memories, but in the longtime it makes a repetitive days. When every day we do a specific job causes we are boring, so this event has a negative influence on the life and it causes our happiness feel will be diminish. To further illustration, I would like to speak about an experiment which last week the television spoke about it. In this experience, researcher experimented action time work on the happiness of two groups of people. Fist group should have worked from 7 AM to 7 PM every day, another group worked from 7 AM to 2 PM every day. After two week researcher analyzed the results of the experiment. They realized that first group had an irregular mental, but the results of second group was amazingly. Second group had a good feel about themselves, because they could besides working, attended in the social activity, therefor, they been happiness rather than former group. Based on the accumulated evidence, we now know that the social life can more effect than doing job.
Secondly, working in the modern area has a stress for workers. Actually, nowadays everyone that work in a company has a hard responsibility, which it causes the workers cannot focus on the personal life. Moreover, this stress makes the artisans strike to the heart diseases. An example can drive this fact and notion home. When my father worked in the bank, one day he stroke heart attack. When I saw the doctor he told me that my father disease is for work stress, and he also mentioned that my father should do activity that causes release his stress. After that day, my father take part in the ceremonies, social event, and etc. As you can see, working makes a different problems for people and probably these dilemmas can eradicate our happiness.
In conclusion, having all reasons and examples into account, I believe that working has a less role in our happiness, because working everyday creates mentality problems and, because it leads to bad illnesses.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'day'?
Suggestion: day
...t in the longtime it makes a repetitive days. When every day we do a specific job ca...
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Line 3, column 608, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...oup worked from 7 AM to 2 PM every day. After two week researcher analyzed the result...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'researcher' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'researchers'.
Suggestion: researchers
... 7 AM to 2 PM every day. After two week researcher analyzed the results of the experiment....
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Line 5, column 371, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'strokes'.
Suggestion: strokes
...y father worked in the bank, one day he stroke heart attack. When I saw the doctor he ...
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Line 5, column 625, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...e part in the ceremonies, social event, and etc. As you can see, working makes a differe...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'problem'?
Suggestion: problem
... you can see, working makes a different problems for people and probably these dilemmas ...
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... role in our happiness, because working everyday creates mentality problems and, because...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and, because it leads to bad illnesses.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78403755869 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59112081407 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516431924883 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5718287083 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6363636364 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3636363636 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86363636364 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180952320877 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556536636978 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760907054663 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104746708897 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0879780194205 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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