Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this progressive and suphisticated world, the advertisement is one of the crutial things that can affect the demand and suply system. When it come to this point, people have some debate as to advertisements make products seem much better or not. personally, I agree with the first group and in what follows, two reasons will be discussed to shed light on this idea.
The first reason coming to my mind to substantiate my stand point is that the responsibility of advertisement is exagration. Producers and managers order and pay for advertisement in order to conceal the defect of their production and show the merit of them. If they tell the truth about their merchenties, the poeple will not buy the products. telling lie is the important key factor in advertisement. They should encourage people to consume products which they are not the consumers staple. For instance, I work in the fish and shrimp company as a veterinarian. My employee ordered some advertisements in order to make people familiar with the product The advertisement, not only exagrate the characteristic of the company and the product, but also hide the abundant of shrimp disadvantages like antibiotic residual and histamine that is harmful for some people and can make the stimulate sudden death in some people.
Another equally noteworthy point corroborating my stance is that the proccedure making of advertisements have an important effect on consumers mind. The esthatistic feature of the product in the film is unreal. Advertise makers try to use some thecniques in order to cheating the viewrs. For example, when we whatch an advertisenment in the TV, we will think that it is very beautifill, But after buying that, we see that the shape of the product is not as the same as when it was on the TV. Threrefore, They cheating us visually to persuade us to buy their products.
To sum up, based on all argumentation stated above, I feel stongly that the advertisements magnified about products because manufacturers order the advertisements to persuade people about their product. On the other hand, Advertise makers use some thechniques that show the product better than the reality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07799442897 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09088039872 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520891364903 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.0664682292 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.235294118 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1176470588 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64705882353 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194591128425 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626922526745 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462652651196 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126882723656 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293059517156 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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