It’s undeniable that the most crucial goal of education is constructing the ability of educating themselves. It seems to some people that education’s goal is just give us knowledge and logical thinking. Because they think what we learned from school is enough for our entire life. While I will take this point in a pinch of salt. In my view, people’s ability of educate themselves is essential for the success both in career and life.
First of all, this kind of education can help us success easier. With the development of society and technology, the situation we need to face will be different in some point of time in career. For example, if we entered Nokia when graduated from college few decades ago, we may think we have no need to learn new things, so did our company. But we know, both we and our company are out because of the competition of new technology. The Peking University’s statics figures suggested that the students who keep learning in their life could get 26% average higher than those who don’t learn any more after graduated. So, the desire of new knowledge could give us more opportunities to be successful.
On the other hand, we also have to update our knowledge of life. All of us are not perfect, we may meet a lot of problems such as crises of marriage or mid-life. We can’t learn all these from our school but we do need some knowledge to face these crises. National Bureau of Statistics of China points out 73% of marriages will break in 5 years. When we are in different period of life, we will need different methods to help us feel easy and happiness. The way how to educate ourselves is what we could get from the education of school that benefits us in every possible problem we will meet in our future.
After what we have discussed above, we can easily come to the conclusion that the every moment after we graduated from school, we will always need new knowledge. So it’s important to educate students how to learn by themselves.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is 70
- For success in a future job the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The most important goal of education is to teach people how to educate themselves 63
- Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 282, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...m school is enough for our entire life. While I will take this point in a pinch of sa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, while, for example, kind of, such as, first of all, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64872521246 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59417707041 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524079320113 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7330049874 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.3684210526 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5789473684 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126037736779 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581762048727 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0866972491134 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102356288306 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0822993859409 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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