Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important way to improve people’s health is to clean the environment.
In the modern era, a healthy body has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, scientists have always sought ways to enhance health condition. A controversial question which is often raised this idea is that the most critical method to enhance human's health is to clear environment. I content that the environment has a direct effect on human's health, so I agree with this proposal. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important factor to be mentioned is that people use their environment directly for continuing their life. To elaborate on my point, when humans want to breathe, they use oxygen from the atmosphere. Air and atmosphere have a lot of gas besides oxygen that people breathe them. In other words, it is important that the weather must be cleaned until individual breathe fresh and clean air, so our environment should be clean. However, if our air becomes dirty, people may get arduous diseases like asthma. Also, polluted air and environment are treated for children and old people. It makes a lot of health problem for them. Furthermore, most individuals do some exercise in the green space like parks, and most children play in the parks; indeed, parks must have a beneficial condition in all aspect especially clean environment. So, it is important for healthy people that their environment becomes clean.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that environment also has an indirect effect on human's health. To shed more light on this matter, all people consume food that has red meat, white meat, vegetable, and many other kinds of materials. So, it is important that they consume organic and healthy food. Consider meat, for instance. Most people tend to eat red meat in every they. They use the meat of cows and ships as red meat; hence, if these animals eat a fresh vegetable, they produce organic and healthy food. But, if they, for example, drink dirty water, they release some kind of disease in their bodies. And, when people want to eat the meat of these animals, animals would transfer their disease to human bodies, and make many problems for humans. This situation also can be related to vegetable, fish, and other materials. Thus, it is so important for the human that their environment becomes clean.
All in all, considering the aforementioned reason leads us to the conclusion that a clean environment is far important for human health. I believe that not only the environment has a direct effect on human health but also a clean environment has an indirect effect on human health.
- TPO 19 81
- TOEFL T P O 34 - Integrated Writing Task 78
- If you want to recommend a way to reduce living expenses for your friend, which of the following will you choose? Why? ۱٫ Find a roommate to share a room۲٫ Do not buy the latest mobile phone, Buy new technological devices less frequently۳٫ Buy cheap 68
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- TPO 29 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 378, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
... the environment has a direct effect on humans health, so I agree with this proposal. ...
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Line 19, column 98, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...ironment also has an indirect effect on humans health. To shed more light on this matt...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, thus, for example, for instance, kind of, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04081632653 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6332770095 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482993197279 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.110373327 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9615384615 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80769230769 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202706737432 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589740240636 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472844981986 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134693261756 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471081435646 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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