Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is a growing trend in terms of the effects of watching movies and television. Some people state that they have a huge impact on young people's behavior, whereas others disagree with this opinion. I agree with the former view for the following reasons.

To begin with, watching movies and television significantly deteriorate students’ grades. In the past, they are broadcasted in a simple way, which provided essential information within a short time. Nowadays, however, the stations split them into several sections in order to offer engaging products. Consequently, they will end up spending their time in front of TVs all day long, resulting in getting dreadful scores. For instance, an attractive British movie was prevalent when I was a high school student. I unintentionally watched it on TV, finding it intriguing. As a result, my after-school life was dominated by this entertainment and my GPA was dramatically declined.

Second, teenagers seem to feel depressed when they watch TV and movies since a few of them contain violent scenes. Three decades ago, broadcasting violent actions was strictly prohibited to prevent children from watching murder cases and dirty jokes. Nowadays, however, this regulation has been eased due to protect the freedom of expression, which resulted in exposing negative contents to the young generation. A study by Oxford University shows that the more violent scenes are displayed, the more threats are posed in youngsters’ brains. This example shows how checking television could serve as a harmful media.

Admittedly, watching television and movies does have merits. In fact, this broadens our horizons. Take my sister as an example, she watched Italian movies as a daily routine. Seeing Italian trends and fashions, she has in details of Italian cultures. However, the prices of movies were not so reasonable that her budget was always tight. In addition, making Italian friends can be substitute for movies as they can teach not only cultures but also Italian language.

In conclusion, given that watching amusements has dreadful effects, we should limit the broadcasting the entertainments.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a simple way" with adverb for "simple"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'medium'?
Suggestion: medium
...ing television could serve as a harmful media. Admittedly, watching television and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, second, so, whereas, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1821.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40356083086 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91586778756 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652818991098 0.524837075471 124% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.8656772514 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7727272727 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3181818182 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158301663353 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446036320959 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490834115544 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0883328965698 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0830628757514 0.0645574589148 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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