Nowadays, movies and televisions play prominent roles in our lives. People spend a lot of time on watching TV or movies. They absorb variety information from TV and other social media, from the latest political campaign to the cutting-edge of medical discovery. Some people may believe that the negative effects of movies and television programs outweigh the positive effects of them; others may disagree. In my view, although in some cases the advantages of TV and movies are considerable, nevertheless, negative effects of TV and movies on youth are more than positive effects for two important reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, there is too much violence on TV and movies these days. Since teenagers are at an impressionable age, anything they are exposed to could seriously impact on their behavior. My experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a bachelor student, I had to live in a dormitory. One of my roommates, namely Samira, was really interested in horror movies. She usually watched a horror movie per week. Unfortunately, she disliked one of my roommates who was really calm and cool. They usually had a quarrel with each other. One night, Samira was extremely angry due to the quarrel that she had had with my roommate. I'm not exaggerating at all, she decided to hurt my roommate by a knife. I was really afraid. Finally, one of the dormitory directors interfered and tried to relax her. According to a new survey conducted by the New York University, she is not the only student who affected by horror movies. The experience thought me that some movies could have bad effects on youth which could be extremely dangerous.
Furthermore, it is more likely that young people do not follow their talents and abilities. Television shows are not customized for individuals. People have different talents and abilities, and it is really important for them to follow their talents to be successful. Especially, youth is the period in which we should make important decisions for our future. Again my experience illustrates the value of this. When I was a high school student, my close friend was such a talented student. She painted drawings which were fascinating. I always thought that she would be a famous artist in the future. Unfortunately, in that period, our country needed computer engineers for working in companies and factories. As a result, all the television programs was about advantages of computer engineering and some other engineering majors. When we graduated from high school, my friend decided to educate in computer engineering. After a while, she understood that was not interested in her major and quit university. As you can see, watching TV could affect the future of youth because it doesn’t allow them to find their talents.
To sum up, I strongly believe that televisions and movies disadvantages outweigh the advantages of them, especially about young people. Not only does it have a lot of violent scenes, but also it does not allow young people to follow their talents. Every country should pass laws to limit television shows for special groups of people.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.Use specific reasons and ex 66
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 73
- Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. 66
- Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. 70
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, while, as a result, in my view, in some cases, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2634.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 524.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02671755725 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84457175784 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492366412214 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 829.8 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5939977467 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.2571428571 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9714285714 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.97142857143 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1905784294 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0416030821143 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626825516507 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127770008412 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755986493219 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.3 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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