Decisions which are related to the future of society play prominent roles in our lives. Some of them change the future of a country and have significant effects on the history of a country. Some people may believe that young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole; others may disagree. In my view, young people have influences on the important decisions in different ways which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, in a lot of countries, youth have the right to participate in a presidential election. In other words, young people could choose the president of their country who plays an important role in the future of society. My experience is a compelling example of this. When I was just graduated of high school, and I was just eighteen-year-old, there was a presidential election in my country. There were two presidential candidates. One of them was from liberals and another one was from reformers. One of the candidates tried to attract young people through advertisements for building new universities. Since in my country the proportion of young people is far more than old people, finally he was successful in the election. As you can see, there are opportunities for young people to make important decisions that influence the future.
Furthermore, young people could influence the important decisions using some important movements. Again my experience illustrates the value of this. In my country, Iran, students have had important roles in the revolution. The university students made a lot of political movements in universities which led to closing the universities for several years. Finally, the activities led to a revolution which changed the future of my country significantly. According to the new statistics, numerous people who were killed during the war were young people. The experience thought me that young people could change the future of a country by doing some important activities.
To sum up, I strongly believe that young people have a significant influence on the future of society. Not only do they participate in important decisions, but also they can do important activities which influence the history and future of a country certainly. Every country should pass laws to give more opportunities to young people.
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- Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. 66
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.Use specific reasons and ex 66
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, may, so, in my view, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1969.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16797900262 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03671251318 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448818897638 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6142869285 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6086956522 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5652173913 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26086956522 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.478372383523 0.236089414692 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135108624776 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.153121759321 0.0737576698707 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.325323653831 0.150856017488 216% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.168900319604 0.0645574589148 262% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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