Arts and sports play prominent roles in our lives. We usually like to do either art or sports activities in our spare time. A few numbers of people like to play sport at the highest levels to become athletic. The importance of arts and sports is crystal clear, but controversial issue is that some people believe that governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics; others may disagree. In my view, although support of the athletics is really important because athletics of each country are well-known all around the world, nevertheless, support of the arts are far more important for two important reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the proportion of the people who are interested in arts activities are much above the people who play athletic sports. In other words, just a few numbers of people like to take part in sports as an athletic, but a large number of people like to do art activities. My experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a high school student, I had a lot of classmates who were really interested in artworks such as playing a musical instrument, play in a movie theatre, painting a drawing etc. Our school had sports teams as well, and some of the students spent their time on playing a sport. The school had two or three students who participated in matches each year. Unfortunately, our school did not have facilities or classes for students to do art activities. Indeed, the main goal of the school was to prepare a few numbers of students for matches. However, they were not successful all of the years. If the school spent more money in support of the arts, the students enjoyed doing artworks. As you can see, the quantity is more important than quality in some cases.
Furthermore, works of art are the main part of our culture. Arts are originated from different parts of the world. Each of them presents the culture of the country where it belongs to. Again my experience illustrates the value of this. Almost six months ago I traveled to India. I visited five big cities in India. In one of them, namely Hyderabad, we went to a museum. There were a lot of statues of Indian gods which were really awesome. They were made out of stone, wood, clay etc. It was notable that they were symbols of different religions India from the past to the present. Also, there were too many artworks out of tusks. I had never seen them before I visited India. When I came back to my country, I explain about them to my family members. They were really interested and decided to travel to India. The experience thought me that artworks of different countries vary each other, and could attract tourists from all over the world.
To sum up, I strongly believe that the government should spend more money in support of the arts. Not only do the number of people who are interested in art activities outweigh the people who want to play sport at the highest level, but also artworks have a more important role in the culture. Every country should pass laws to allocate more budget to invest more money in art activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, well, as to, such as, in my view, in other words, in some cases, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 90.0 52.1666666667 173% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2577.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 555.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64324324324 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53516522902 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452252252252 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 796.5 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.6094424364 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.7941176471 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3235294118 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61764705882 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224259376257 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523763080145 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0969382659522 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172387911848 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119406093636 0.0645574589148 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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