Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.

In today's modern world with the development of technology and social media celebrities and famous people share their opinion freely without any concern. Most of their followers are young person so their every idea has an impact on them. From my point of view, celebrities' opinions have more influence on younger people than older people. I express two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
First, most of the teen ages have role models between celebrities like athletes, singers, actors and follow their lifestyles, opinions to be successful like them. Nowadays with the development of social media, the youth can easily get information's about their popular celebrities. They are more active than their parents in social media. For example, I have a cousin, he likes Ronaldo too much and he follows his lifestyle every day he wears like him, he plays football, even he cut his hair like him and it is not important to him it is a good look on him too or not. So I think he probably changes his mind after he gets older.
Second, in younger age people be more emotional and sensitive everything can impact them easily even small words can change their opinion but for older people, it is not like that. Old people have the power to distinguish reality from show off most of the time. Celebrities' opinions or lifestyles hardly can have an impact on older people. They know this fact real life is very different from what the celebrities share on social media but youth think it's their real daily life. For example, when celebrities share their photo in their luxury pool in summer, youth think about why they cannot have a life like them and why in the celebrities' life everything goes well.
To sum up, from my vantage point, celebrities' opinion has an impact on younger ages than older ones because of two main reasons. First, most of the youth have role model from celebrities and they follow them on social media and their activity influences them. Second, youth are more emotional than older people so they cannot know celebrities' behavior is reality or show off.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s share on social media but youth think its their real daily life. For example, whe...
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...rities behavior is reality or show off.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, so, well, for example, i think, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82681564246 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44167314256 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483240223464 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5153277246 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.647058824 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0588235294 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17647058824 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239801627891 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968677306799 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772495875486 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183052903767 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675691990932 0.0645574589148 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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