Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today’s world, with respect to increasing impact of media, role of celebrities in societies is of vital importance. A controversial question that is often raised regarding this issue is whether famous people are more important to younger people compared to older people. Some people possess the conviction that this argument is true, whereas others hold the opposite view and allege that the importance of well-known people is equal for all individuals. I personally contend that young men and women pay more attention to celebrities than mature people. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraghs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that from a psychological point of view, as people grow and become mature, they pay less heed to others. In other words, they concentrate on themselves rather than others to grow their personality in manifold fields. For instance, they exert their efforts to learn more skills contributing to elevation of occupational positions. Mature people do not have too much time to waist by pursuing celebrities in social media. The noteworthy statistics revealed by recent social research conducted in our country, show that approximately 70 percent of people with the age of 35 to 45 know less celebrities than young people between 15 and 25 years old.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that younger people are rely more on emossions and excitements rather than rational and knowledge. Therefore, famous people, particularly people who are widely in media, can easily stimulate them. In order to make this point more clear, consider my personal experience. When I was child, I adored a well-known soccer player, namely David Beckham. He was my idol. I did anything to become similar to him. I collected a large number of his photos. Besides, I attempted to immitate him in playing. Nowadays, although I am interested to him, I do not pay crazy attention to every work or quates about him.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that celebrities play a key role in societies, however, they have low influence on older people than young people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
...ng reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 2, column 670, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun celebrities is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...of people with the age of 35 to 45 know less celebrities than young people between 1...
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Line 2, column 734, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ung people between 15 and 25 years old. The second rationale behind this opinion...
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Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'relied'.
Suggestion: relied
...ted in the fact that younger people are rely more on emossions and excitements rathe...
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Line 3, column 480, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...g to become similar to him. I collected a large number of his photos. Besides, I attempted to imm...
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Line 3, column 579, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ate him in playing. Nowadays, although I am interested to him, I do not pay crazy...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, for instance, in brief, in other words, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16260162602 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89971126809 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59620596206 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5349214459 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.25 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.45 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282902831571 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701113203068 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062904914016 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168108533439 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048171707606 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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