Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to mange their own money at young age.
In my opinion children after a certain age should be given small amount of money to understand the financially responsibility they will to have in the future, I completely agree with the statement. Personally, I believe that as giving children money at small age will make them ready for the problems they may financially when they are grown up, also will easily tackle the situation when they already have an idea about everything.I feel this for 2 reasons, which i will explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all, nowadays as all the banking and documentation services and everything is becoming online and advanced, that it is hard for the people who have done all paper work for all these years. Although, people are learning I feel if small children after a certain will be given some money they will understand how to save some for later and can use the rest. Also which you can advice them and from that they slowly learn. My personal experience is great example of this as my mom used to give me pocket money obviously for snacks or candies. And always used to say if you have been given 10rs always keep the 2rs aside and spent the rest. Which also become an habit, a good one that now help me save lot more than just 2rs. For this reason, children should been given money and taught things at young age which help them cultivate habits for their own good.
Secondly, knowing how to manage money at young age can make things more familiar and easy later on. Drawing from my own experience where as I and my brother both were given pocket money. When were my pocket money used to get over and still needed to buy something, I used to borrow from my brother. And in few day my brother used to ask me to return it. And I gave it back when I got my next pocket money. So from that situation, I learn that you need borrow from people if you can return them back. It is certainly clear to see why, that children do come across a lot of situation when they are given money from which they learn.
I strongly believe that have practical knowledge of using money is important from young age to make correct decision in finance when older. This is because you can at least predict want can happen and are prepared for it also they know that in order to get what they want they need to save money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, at least, i feel, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42957746479 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24568399554 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467136150235 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3277976568 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.833333333 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233872231789 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077508898932 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641275018688 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145312239062 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282355689285 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.71 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.78 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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