Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Each day of our life, we face a lot of situations that need crucial decision-taking, and Young people need help for doing that more than others. However, I am of the opinion that today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives, more than in the past periods. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the presence of the Internet has a wonderful impact on our lives, which helps the youth to make decisions, without being so much dependent on their families. My compelling experience is a good example of this. Ten years ago, I finished high school with a high grade. I was so motivated to begin university, which was a new phase in my life. I was interested in medical fields so much. However, at the same time, I loved engineering. I was so fascinated by the engineering work around the world, and my parents advised me to study Engineering. I was really hesitant about which field to study. I decided to use the Internet to know every detail about each field. there were different websites on the internet talking about medicine and engineering. In addition, I had read several opinions from different people who wrote about their experiences in each field. This was extremely helpful and helped me to know the advantages and the disadvantages of them. As a result, I was able to decide that medicine is better for my future life.
Secondly, today, we can make a lot of relationships with so many different people around the world, which means we are more exposed to people's experiences. To be specific, in the past, people used to live in small towns. They related only to their families and close relatives. Additionally, they were busy with their hard works that lasted all their day time. Therefore, they didn't have too much time to think about others, and there were no available facilities that make communication easier with others. On the other hand, advanced technologies helped us to get in touch with people, even though if they are far from us. Therefore, the adolescent can ask many skilled people to help them make the right decisions. In addition, they see many experiences in front of them.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that nowadays, youngs are more able to decide effectively than before. This is because of the available internet access worldwide and advanced technologies. Nowadays, they are more able to know the right answers for each question they face in their life and to make the best decisions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, talking about, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80459770115 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69977074133 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508045977011 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0942220714 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.4074074074 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1111111111 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338428486639 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795924688643 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869725685436 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209493785349 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.093020351553 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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