Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People are happier when they give money to charity or a good cause rather than when they spend it on themselves.
Nowadays, with rapid modernization ongoing, individuals have witnessed the unprecedented accumulation of material affluence. How to expend extra money is still an earnest concern among the public. Some people reckon that we had better allocate the money to satisfy our own needs, while others hold a reverse viewpoint that it will be more beneficial to us to distribute the money to charity or a good cause. As far as I am concerned, I definitely concur with the latter idea, and what I believe can be substantiated as follows.
In the first place, giving money to charity and a good cause can directly improve your life satisfaction and well-being. As we all know, human beings are social animals, and our intuitions guide us to give hand to others when they are facing a crisis. When you support others, you can readily have a sense of achievement since you are needed by others. It is enormously difficult to derive this feeling from expending money on yourself. Moreover, when you receive thanks letters or other types of appreciation from others, it will reinforce your belief that your life is meaningful and that you are contributing to others' lives and welfare as well. According to a series of empirical research in the field of psychology, it is investigated that giving money to others is significantly associated with life satisfaction and even can facilitate positive mental cognitions.
In addition, just because you spend money on others does not mean the money will not deliver benefits to your life and improve your happiness in a long term. To illustrate, donating money to some scientific organizations committed to studying renewable energy will curb further pollution and decrease the exhaust and emission of greenhouse gases and toxic compounds, which will be conducive to your physical and mental health. Spending money on some charity organizations focusing on women’s protection will improve the situation of all women around the world. Imagine that you are a female student. After graduating from the university, owing to your money donated to these organizations, you will benefit from the narrowed disparity between men and women in companies in terms of salary, rights, and even extra welfare.
Admittedly, you’re also equipped with the power to utilize your hard-earned money to buy something you want or to experience something you dream about. You are capable of possessing some direct happiness and rewards in this process. Nevertheless, those feelings are just like bubbles. They will easily fade off, and if you spend money in an improper way, you even will fall into the pitfalls of consumerism with ease. The deficiencies are supposed to be emphasized before further actions aiming to spend money.
In a nutshell, although everyone has his own right to decide how to spend money, every single penny we earned should be made full use of. Charities and good causes still come top of the agenda if we care about others’ and our lives in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an improper way" with adverb for "improper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...easily fade off, and if you spend money in an improper way, you even will fall into the pitfalls o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, well, while, in addition, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2509.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09959349593 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82079479998 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552845528455 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 804.6 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5105945058 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.045454545 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3636363636 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59090909091 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248138096446 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712711519835 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441489655402 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135830771222 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524685318261 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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