Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much money on clothing to improve their appearance.
In this day and age, the question of whether to spend too much money on outfits to increase appearance has been receiving a great deal of public attention. However, some people believe that looks don't matter. I strongly advocate that, if people have good looks, they will have a variety of benefits which I will list below.
At first, having a good look can create many opportunities to have a good job. This means that people can have a bias when applying for a job in any company because most jobs nowadays need a nice-looking when having a conversation with customers or partner especially in a business major. For example, it is true that humans have a tendency of talking with people who have attractive outlooks than people who are unattractive. From that, it is business can have a higher chance to co-operate with a good business or organization. Moreover, there is a statistic shows that good-looking people make about 12% more money than less appealing folks which means that if people invest money in clothing to improve their appearance, they will obtain ample interest in the future.
Another welfare that humans acquire when investing in clothing is that humans can meet new kinds of people. There are many people who feel upset about their appearance so that they miss the chance to meet new people or the person they love. This means that, when people buying new clothes or makeup to make them prettier, at first, they will be more confident and have opportunities to meet new people to have more social relationship which is useful in their career. For example, I once saw a Korean movie about a girl who can get everyone's recognition and feels more confident when she invests in clothes to change her's appearance which she used to get beaten up and people laughed at for her bad looks.
In brief, it is not denied when investing in our appearance so that humans should always try to have good looks when it is possible if people want to receive abundant benefits from it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 22, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
In this day and age, the question of whether to spend too much money on outfits to i...
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Line 1, column 197, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...However, some people believe that looks dont matter. I strongly advocate that, if pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, moreover, so, for example, in brief, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 27.0 11.0286738351 245% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1645.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72701149425 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52668902289 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505747126437 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.1112381069 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.538461538 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7692307692 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176272427399 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071211053695 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512681862696 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110222673408 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351717713604 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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