Task: “Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world. Do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age, the question of whether education is an essential weapon for humans to use as a method to change the world has been receiving a great deal of public attention. I strongly advocate this idea due to the plenty of benefits of education that I will list below.
To begin with, people can use education as a way to gain better knowledge and awareness. With this process, every person can learn different things in life, such as communicating with people or handling a challenging situation. For example, in Vietnam before 1975, most citizens did not know how to read or behave properly; fortunately, Vietnam was united and education gradually propagated into Vietnam to become kind and less aggressive. This means that education has a significant influence on how Vietnamese nowadays communicate and behave positively.
Another benefit is that the country could have great talented people. These people can work in the government of their country so that the government can be operated by many good people which is a good thing because they can suggest various strategies to help the country overcome the problems that exist. For example, if a government has a suitable controller, the country will not have poverty or lack of employment. This means that this country could be an epitome for other countries to follow in order to have a perfect planet for humans to live on. Last but not least, due to complex education, workers could be trained to be more productive so that they can work more efficiently and be more creative in the way they work. This implies that every country can develop together to make an effect of globalization to change the world to become more positive.
In brief, education brings humans a variety of good things such as better awareness or a better government structure. These factors will be a key for people to change the world and become better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 22, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
In this day and age, the question of whether education is an essential weapon for hu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, for example, in brief, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88544891641 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68969519039 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510835913313 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8348028881 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.714285714 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14229263847 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053300008765 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465347306915 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0945810429443 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290040667889 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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