Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Subjects such as art, music, and drama should be a part of every child's basic education
Each subject in the education system will bring each benefit to children's development. There are some comments that art, music, and drama should not appear in the education curriculum; however, I firmly believe that these disciplines need to be a part of kids' primary education due to the variety of benefits it will bring, which I will list below.
To begin with, learning the arts will help children to develop their potential skills. With art, it facilitates children with an excellent imagination to have a good view when observing things. This means that, in the future, kids can easily have a good observation of objects to make an art piece become a masterpiece. Furthermore, when studying music, children could practice composing or playing musical instruments at a young age to have many opportunities to perform at a big stage. Besides that, with drama, there is a claim that the sooner you practice drama, the better your career will be in the future. Also, with this kind of education, young kids can have a chance to know whether they are suitable for entertainment jobs or not.
Another benefit of art, music, and drama is that kids can develop their visual interpretation and visual skills. This means that kids will easily discover beautiful landscapes that will benefit people who want to become artists or musicians because they can easily get inspired by the surrounding environment to compose music. Moreover, these skills absorb from a young age, also helps kids have more chances to have good workplaces.
All things considered, art, music, and drama need to include in kid education. The kids will receive many benefits if they master these disciplines.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1402.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 278.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04316546763 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68212206842 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568345323741 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4878186652 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.846153846 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3846153846 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184166908239 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735370699149 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589033256025 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117675938704 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510145713888 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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