Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Almost everyone agrees that enjoying our time is a great way to ensure a more prosperous life. But do people nowadays use much time to adore their lives rather than doing pieces of stuff that are necessary for a living? Many people assume that we are conspicuously forced to look at our future and quit enjoying things. However, it would be prudent to say that people now are concerned with things that help them indulge their moments. I feel this way for two reasons which I will examine in this essay.

First, it is important to consider social media's effect. Obviously, with the great spread of social media, it is clear that most of us get trapped in a variety of things that encourage us to have fun. In contrast, a long time ago, when our grandparents were not exposed to any type of social media, they were free to practice their favorite activities and enjoy their time in simple ways. As a result, our technological societies have been a factor that pushed us to learn about many new things. My personal experience can demonstrate this. I love social media apps; I spend a significant time daily watching my favorite apps, such as Instagram, Snapchat, and Facebook. Although most of the activities and events that I heard about were in other countries, I was very interested in joining these events and traveled many times to watch them and have nice memories. Therefore, due to social media's impact, I joined many fun activities that I never knew about. Hence, if I had not been interested in following social media, I would not have known about these events.

Besides the importance of media, another significant reason is that our contemporary communities put us under huge stress. Evidently, it is not easy today to live independently from our families where it costs a lot to rent a house, get medical insurance, and study at one of the universities with a good reputation. As a result, most people try to enjoy their life and spend many days for fun to counteract the effect of this stressful life. For instance, there is a great increase in the number of gyms, clubs, and events places that would help most of us have a nice time. Consequently, if our life had not been stressful, we would not have spent extended time looking for fun.

In conclusion, I believe that nowadays people spend a lot of time on things that lead to enjoyment. This opinion is because of the huge effect of social media advertising many events and because most people want to get rid of their tension.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69318181818 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58779617621 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506818181818 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0524387269 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3333333333 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9523809524 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95238095238 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158692096346 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464177575545 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652720259443 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106273915455 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0777441848362 0.0645574589148 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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