Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Task 2: Writing Based on Knowledge and Experience
It is of great worth to discuss whether people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment rather than doing things they should do. The answer of the question can vary depending on each individual's perspective. As fas as I'm concerned, I agree with the statement because they can get rid of their negative feeling by doing thing they like to do.
First of all, doing things they like to do can relieve stress.
This is mainly because, people can get over their stressful situations while consuming their time on enjoyable things. People in these days get stressed out a lof from a huge workload and its pressure. The pressure is often originated from doing things they should do. However, they need to get rid of their stress by doing enjoyable things. Through this quality time, they will eventually be able to get back their works.
The perfect example of this is a friend of mine. He used to suffer from a heavy workload. He sometimes stayed up all night getting his work done, so he was basically exhausted mentally and physically. Then, one day, he got to have a chance to join an inline hockey club, and it truly allowed him to escape from all the stressful matters like the pressure he should do his work. Thanks to this, he now has a relaxed and confident mental state.
Second, they can feel a good atmosphere by doing something which makes people enjoyable.
This is mainly because, most of people can be influenced by their environments' atmosphere. The influence of the atmosphere is a lot more important than they think. Thus, they should feel a good atmosphere. Doing things they like to do simply makes them so cheerful and energetic that they can go to their work with confidence.
The perfect example of this is my cousin. When he was prepared for university entrance exam, he was struggling with mathematics. Then, one day, he had to go through such a difficult situation, so he got stressed out a lot. He thought he needed to have rest, and he played internet game with his friend. It made him so cheerful and energetic, but he spent his time too much. However, he didn't regret for this because he solved the situation that bothered him.
To summarize what I've mentioned above, I'm for the notion because although people consume too much time to do things like to do, they can remove their stress, and feel a positive feelings. Moreover, people can show more outstanding performance after they enjoy their favorite things.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 61
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 70
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ting Based on Knowledge and Experience It is of great worth to discuss whether ...
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Line 6, column 191, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...the question can vary depending on each individuals perspective. As fas as Im concerned, I ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...each individuals perspective. As fas as Im concerned, I agree with the statement b...
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Line 11, column 25, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ple enjoyable. This is mainly because, most of people can be influenced by their environments...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y can go to their work with confidence. The perfect example of this is my cousin...
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Suggestion: didn't
...he spent his time too much. However, he didnt regret for this because he solved the s...
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Suggestion: I've
... that bothered him. To summarize what Ive mentioned above, Im for the notion beca...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
... To summarize what Ive mentioned above, Im for the notion because although people ...
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Line 13, column 179, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'feeling'?
Suggestion: feeling
...emove their stress, and feel a positive feelings. Moreover, people can show more outstan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, thus, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75688073394 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51474483545 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518348623853 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5365252155 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.8148148148 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1481481481 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.53405017921 198% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406216869535 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130012209536 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155026408865 0.0737576698707 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233401790594 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.178912294044 0.0645574589148 277% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ting Based on Knowledge and Experience It is of great worth to discuss whether ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 191, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...the question can vary depending on each individuals perspective. As fas as Im concerned, I ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 226, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...each individuals perspective. As fas as Im concerned, I agree with the statement b...
^^
Line 11, column 25, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ple enjoyable. This is mainly because, most of people can be influenced by their environments...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 327, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y can go to their work with confidence. The perfect example of this is my cousin...
^^^
Line 12, column 387, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...he spent his time too much. However, he didnt regret for this because he solved the s...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 19, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
... that bothered him. To summarize what Ive mentioned above, Im for the notion beca...
^^^
Line 13, column 40, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
... To summarize what Ive mentioned above, Im for the notion because although people ...
^^
Line 13, column 179, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'feeling'?
Suggestion: feeling
...emove their stress, and feel a positive feelings. Moreover, people can show more outstan...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, thus, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75688073394 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51474483545 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518348623853 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5365252155 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.8148148148 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1481481481 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.53405017921 198% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406216869535 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130012209536 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155026408865 0.0737576698707 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233401790594 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.178912294044 0.0645574589148 277% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.