people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
How we utilize time plays an important role in our lives. A proper schedule in utilization of time can make our lives productive. Some believe that people spend too much time on personal enjoyment rather than using time to do some productive stuff. Whereas, others, I am sure would oppose this opinion. In my opinion, I support the later one and will provides two reasons of support in the following essay.
First, there is no enough time for people to spend time on personal enjoyment. In the current world scenario, people mostly involve in earning money by working in some organisations or any businesses, and there is no leisure time for them to enjoy. In contrast, in the past, people spend only specific amount of time to work and in the remaining time they continued to pursue their interests. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. My parents, before their retirement, used to work eight hours a day and in the remaining time they pursued their relaxing activities like watching television, reading newspaper and many more. Whereas, in the present world, because of increasing internet facilities and mobiles all around made coerced people to work more. Even after my regular office hours, I receive phone calls related to office work, and had to work until late night to accomplish those assigned works. Whereas, I can't remember a single evidence about getting phone calls on office related work after their regular work time.
Second, most of the people use leisure time to do things that enhance their lifestyles. Most people choose to do activities that are beneficial to them in multiple ways. For instance, whenever I have free time, I choose to go to a gym and do some exercises to feel relaxed from daily hectic work schedule. Though I enjoy it, I do it mainly to maintain my good health. As I do some activities in gym, it makes me feel gaining a fresh hope so that I can perform offioe related works with more interest and energy. Though I enjoy it, the main purpose is personal improvement rather than personal enjoyment.
In conclusion, people aren't spending more time on personal enjoyment, rather they are doing some productive stuff in their lives. Not only do we have no time to enjoy but also if we do anything we do it for personal improvement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 352, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
...inion, I support the later one and will provides two reasons of support in the following...
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Line 2, column 933, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...mplish those assigned works. Whereas, I cant remember a single evidence about gettin...
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Line 4, column 23, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...sonal enjoyment. In conclusion, people arent spending more time on personal enjoymen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1896.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57284202842 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541772151899 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5617859787 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2857142857 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8095238095 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388010076716 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120181897289 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113282379379 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271918745382 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119357202107 0.0645574589148 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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