Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyments - doing things they like to do - rather than things they should.
People work a lot every day, trying to earn a living and becoming so tired that all they have time for is sleep. But does humanity really spend most of its life in labour rather than on parties? I personally believe that technical progress and equal rights made free time and personal enjoyments more accessible and priority.
To begin with, it is no doubt that at the beginning of the 20th century, the world went through global changes. Machines and robots have replaced manual labor, making life easier for millions of housewives and factory workers, businessmen and entrepreneurs. Now everyone, if desired, no longer requires a dishwasher or a washing machine, when instead of cleaning a house it is more amusing to watch a TV . Moreover, phone booths have turned into iPhones, using which people no longer need to go several kilometers into the city. There are many similar examples, but the most catchy for me is a period when my grandfather replaced his old printing equipment with a new one, which encouraged him to start playing tennis as he began spending less time in the office. Thus, the hours for work and leisure have been balanced and made my grandfather reveal the life to the fullest.
Another point is that women who eventually achieved equality have consolidated the norm to have a well-paid job, which in many ways relieves the burden from men. Now the money goes to the family from two persons, and household duties are also fair divided. My parents lives by this principle: my father does not waste a minute to help my mother looking after the kids and cooking dinner. This way, they free up few hours and go to meet their friends. Accordingly, other families also no longer need to spend a lot of time for the duties, which society once considered a base.
To sum up, people started doing their hobbies and interests, rather than responsibilities. But there is an explanation, which consists in simpler and improved techniques, as well as changed social norms that have expanded the scope of opportunities for women and men.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...a house it is more amusing to watch a TV . Moreover, phone booths have turned into...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, look, moreover, really, so, thus, well, no doubt, as well as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84375 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61034900882 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627840909091 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7788810174 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.5625 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123207366863 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405240322992 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511166057588 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0862883210323 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053512127952 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...a house it is more amusing to watch a TV . Moreover, phone booths have turned into...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, look, moreover, really, so, thus, well, no doubt, as well as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84375 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61034900882 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627840909091 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7788810174 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.5625 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123207366863 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405240322992 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511166057588 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0862883210323 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053512127952 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.