It is better to be independent from the parents as soon as possible
Agree of disagree?
People tend to hold different views on whether it’s better to be independent from the parents as soon as possible or this process should be more gradual and not requiring the rush. I actually agree that it’s better to be separated from the parents as this approach prepares a young person for the real difficulties of life and just offers many other benefits. I feel strongly about it because such an autonomy make teenagers feel a financial strength and gives and opportunity to manage their accounts as they like. Additionally, I believe that the suppression of children’s desires and viewpoints appeared due to strong parents’ influence can be solved by living individually too.
To begin with, parents undoubtedly provide a monetary support that keeps youngsters under control. But this control has its drawbacks, which consist an uncertainty, because you never know when parents have money and when they don't. In addition, from a moral point of view, it is not ethical to live at the expense of another person. Such a life only worsens a person's condition and his attitude to material things, when independence will bring experience. Such a method of upbringing does not deprive children of the support of parents who can teach a young person financial literacy so that he can get back on his feet as quickly as possible and no longer need help. I remember my grandmother told a story about her cousin who lived with his parents and lived off them for quite a long time till his late 20s, but once they died he couldn’t get back to normal life: no working background a sudden rush of responsibility only spoilt him. Accordingly, at this point becoming independent from the parents as soon as possible is a gradual process, which gives a chance to try ones hand on the path to economic stability.
Furthermore, children often face pressure from their parents when making an important choice, whether it is related to a profession or buying furniture. Over time, the line of one's own opinion and the opinion of relatives is erased, which has a bad effect on a person who is unable to make an independent decision. If a person isolate himself from the influence of family and live separately, then he can improve the positions and understand what is closer to the soul, based only on own preferences, while the enforced opinion sometimes leads to failures and depression. When I was a child my mother always decided everything for me, which is why our house was always filled with swearing and dramatics. After some time, we realized that only that one own opinion would give positive results so independence in this case is a path to harmony and happiness.
To sum up, living without parents is a useful thing, which stimulates the desire to earn money and it makes a person more confident in their decisions, which certainly affects the well-being of both an independent one and the whole family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...w when parents have money and when they dont. In addition, from a moral point of vie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, but, furthermore, if, so, then, well, while, i feel, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2425.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87927565392 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7413599011 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551307847082 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.8665296114 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.647058824 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2352941176 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279317445067 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904007083661 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101493222744 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174968859165 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111576724413 0.0645574589148 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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