Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing games together is a good way to build closer relationships
Having a healthy relationship is the ultimate concern of people regarding their social life. While some believe that is better not to play games with others to have an intimate relationship. I beg to differ, I think that playing games, and better contact with other individuals can help tremendously in building a great and close relationship.
Many people out there propose that continuous contact with other can actually cause more harm that benefits. As conficts between the two parties can occur. Since eveyone has his own perspective. In my opinion, I believe that this theory is false. The more we spend time and perform different types of activities with other individuals such as games for example, the deeper and closer the relationship gets. Back in the days, In my sophomore year at dental school, I was new to the city and I had no friends only few casual acquaintances. But, after I joind the basket teams at the college, I gained true friends. Because the fact that used to spend a lot of time together training for that match. If i had not played basket ball with them, I would not have close to them.
Moreover, by playing games with other a person can discover more interesting part of others characters, which eventually helps in making the relashionship even closer. But some introvent types of people might contradict with this. They suggest that it is better find other alternative ways to build relashion with other. Personally I think that when the person plays, He shows the real personality by being genuine toward others. My past experience during that basketball play taught me alot about others player. I learned that whenever I was down and needed help. they would help me and support me to go through tough times. As a result, we were all like a big happy family.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that in order to become close to someone, spend more time with this person and play games to achieve a healthy and close relationship.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...actually cause more harm that benefits. As conficts between the two parties can oc...
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...icts between the two parties can occur. Since eveyone has his own perspective. In my ...
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...me together training for that match. If i had not played basket ball with them, I...
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Suggestion: experience
...lity by being genuine toward others. My past experience during that basketball play taught me a...
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...at whenever I was down and needed help. they would help me and support me to go thro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, moreover, regarding, so, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83136094675 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63393545476 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579881656805 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3403884311 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.7619047619 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0952380952 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199388917045 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535841690909 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590361462369 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134944370806 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330561744686 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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