Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Success is defined by the amount of money someone earns.
Unfortunately, in todays society, many people believe that how much you earn tells how successful you are. How do people tell? They look at the clothes you wear, the cars you drive, and more. But I believe money is only one way of being successful. There are many other ways to achieve success.
One way you can be success is by helping other people. Like Malala Yousafzai. As a younger girl in Pakistan, she was shot in the face for defying authority and going to school. After her recovery, she went on to fight for the rights of other girls to go to school and became humanitarian. I think she is very successful.
Another way you can be successful is by changing your community. My friend’s father is a veteran and so wanted to help other veterans. He was very active in his community and did a lot of things to help make life better for other veterans. By his actions he encouraged other people to also help veterans, and people began to care more about taking care of veterans as a result.
A third way to be successful without money is to earn university degree. For example, I was first person in my family to earn a degree in the United States. My parents moved here when I was very small hoping to offer me and my brother a better life. They sacrificed much things in order to give us opportunity. I really appreciate all the things they did to make it possible for us to go to university.
As you can see, earning a lot of money is not the only way to earn success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 267, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... brother a better life. They sacrificed much things in order to give us opportunity....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, so, third, for example, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1219.0 1977.66487455 62% => OK
No of words: 277.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.40072202166 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53764165601 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537906137184 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 396.9 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0431356553 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 60.95 100.406767564 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.85 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118292495472 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0422892890859 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492720759319 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0802063174583 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554233831866 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.2 11.7677419355 53% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.65 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.79 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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