Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is not a secret that the desire to achieve success is in human nature. As far as I am concerned, not all successful people go for new experiences and taking risks in their lives. I will elaborate on my reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is a dramatic fact the time people possess is limited, which makes it challenging to go for something new every time. Having that in mind, it does not seem a rational action to dedicate a valuable asset such as time to something new and risky. Successful people have invested a lot of time and energy to reach the climax of a certain field. In the path of victory, they not only have gone through difficulties, but also learned from their mistakes, which are time-consuming as well. On the other hand, there is no guaranty that attempting a new aim will lead to success again. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I was a teenager, I won the gold medal for Mathematics Olympiad. Some of my teachers were persistent to go for the gold medal in Chemistry as well. However, I knew I had to study a lot and start the subjects at the basic level, and try to be admitted at the university at the same time. As I was aware, I could not spend my time to both study Chemistry and following the university entrance, I refused to go for the medal in Chemistry.
Another key factor to remember is that most prosperous people became successful because they stayed focused on only one thing, so they finally approached victory. It is a well-known quote that: “The more you practice, the more you achieve.” This accounts for the cardinal importance of “concentration”. The biography of Thomas Edison could be an excellent example here. Edison did not overcome the challenge of the light bulbs on his first try at the experiment. He never gave up, never went for other directions and goals in his career, and at last, he did what he wanted the most: a light bulb for using electricity for everyone.
In conclusion, I believe that people who obtained an astonishing achievement in their life will not pursue brand-new objects. This is because they do not own limitless time and need to be concentrated on one task to be successful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 101, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'going', 'gonna'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: going; gonna
... is limited, which makes it challenging to go for something new every time. Having th...
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Line 4, column 232, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...centrated on one task to be successful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, well, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1824.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62944162437 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8648965514 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535532994924 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2206078263 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177442804733 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477086460751 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034238856075 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109391070897 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231150646064 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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