Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that television advertisement should not be produced for young children because this kind of commercial programs may be has a destructive influence on children minds. Contrary, to this popular beliefs, there are still those who argue that now there is not any evidence to verify claim about harmful effects of commercial advertising for young children and most of this negative concept is just a policy for limitation of the advertising company. I, to the great extent, agree with this idea that the advertisement company should avoid from producing television advertising for young children.
First and foremost, psychologists demonstrated that most of the children in this age cannot distinguish between truth and false information. All of the adult's people know that most of the advertiser usually bold the positive traits of products and try to show products better than they really are. But, clearly young children have a very few experiences and their knowledge about their world around is very thin. For example, in a TV advertising show that one kind of breakfast has high nutrition value and useful for health. But a child concluded that this only this kind of food led to them can be grown and become a powerful adult.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that children have a pure feeling so it is very important to protect from any unpleasant effects. For example, some advertising strategy, for instance, using one doll as the main character of a popular animation. Most of the children see this TV program and all of them want to have this doll because their friends have it. Therefore, if some of the children can not the possibility of achieving this doll so they embarrass among their friends.
Finally, young children have the low ability to separate fantasy from reality. For example, some for children believe that the dolls in the theater are really alive. Some of the commercial advertising for these age children using fantasy for the attraction of children. Unfortunately, because of high ability of imagination they interested in repeating the action of this unreal characters and this can lead to life-threaten or mental harm to young children.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that television advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed. Because of preventing from misuse of advertising company from low experience, immature brain ability and pure feeling of children.
- TPO 45 63
- TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends 70
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- TPO 40 61
- Do you agree or disagree?in the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2115.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17114914425 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83559348 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491442542787 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5445492161 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.5 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7222222222 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215472467243 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858167038944 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849051574388 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14682946058 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686654066595 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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