Together with the improvements in society, it seems evident that sports and social activities are imperative just like academic subjects. Thus, the question has been raised as to whether the university should give students financial aid not only in studies but also on their talent in recreational. While it is undeniable that both arguments have their own merits to boast; if forced to choose one over another, my resolute standpoint is definitely in line with giving them fair financial support to non-educational matters which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, investing money in sports and social activities in college can help the students to build their confidence and teamwork which is essential in their future careers. In other words, playing sports gives them an opportunity to learn skills that can be used in their work. I assume that a personal example can shed light on this notion. A couple of years ago when I was studying at Seoul University, the school funded the same amount of money on recreational as they did on educational purposes. participating in a football match helped to broaden my perspective and learn useful skills such as cooperating and interacting which I did not know before.
Moreover, spending money on sports and social activities can improve the facility of the environment and also hire professional professors. This would, in turn, motivate students to take part in sports which are imperative in maintaining good health. Research by Harvard University shows that colleges with modern recreational facilities have more students participated in sports than those institutions that have old types of equipment in their sports gym. This clearly shows why colleges should fund equal finances in sports and social activities like educational programs.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that colleges should spend money on sports and social activities because of the abovementioned reasons. Therefore, nothing in my mind cast doubt on my stance regarding the given statement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Participating
...al as they did on educational purposes. participating in a football match helped to broaden m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, in conclusion, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33434650456 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93019523331 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589665653495 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.672618698 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.357142857 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.85714285714 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235437669019 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0771054931771 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457886450459 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137239404101 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236849409103 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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