Together with the improvements in society, it seems rather ironic that children often misbehave and result in repercussions. Thus, the question has been raised as to whether parents should intentionally allow their kids to create mistakes and let them learn a lesson from it or not. While it is undeniable that both arguments have their merits to boast; if forced to choose one over another, my resolute standpoint is definitely in line with the latter which I would explain the reasons in the following essay.
To begin with, allowing children to make mistakes gives them a firm awareness to not do in the future. To be specific, when children grow up, they would not make the same mistake because they had already encountered serious repercussions before. I assume that a personal example can shed light on this notion. When I was a primary student in South Korea, I used to play a lot of mobile games even though my mom asked me not to do it. But what I did not realize was that I had no time to study for my exam and in the end receive a low mark. This experience taught me an important lesson which kind of gave me a useful reminder in my mind to never play games for long hours. Should I not face the consequences of my mistake, I would have never able to fix my negative action. This example clearly shows why parents should permit their children to make mistakes instead of just scolding them.
Moreover, children can have the determination to do better next time if parents let them make mistakes. In other words, when children are given the opportunity to struggle and sometimes fail in their examinations, parents are actually allowing them to improve their academic performance. A recent study by the University of Omega shows that when a child is scolded for getting low grades in an exam, he or she would have the decision to get a high mark next time. Besides, the child also builds their confidence which is crucial when working in a company. This clearly shows why parents should let children fail.
In conclusion, I strongly believe parents should give children a chance to create trouble because of the abovementioned reasons. Therefore, nothing in my mind cast doubt on my stance regarding the given statement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ons. Thus, the question has been raised as to whether parents should intentionally allow thei...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, in conclusion, kind of, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74871794872 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64664078207 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553846153846 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5900035473 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.888888889 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94444444444 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344002427978 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108146020711 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111126307645 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195944832391 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658574606584 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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